hmm... where to begin? That was simply lovely; I loved your use of figurative diction, etc. ad infinitum, and you effectively convey a poetically astounding point. The first two lines... simply magnificent.

-Luka

Wow...that was nice. It's also very true. that was very beautiful.

wow, very powerful!

My course website is taking a LONG time to load, so I thought I would check out your poem. This is marvelous! My favourite stanzas are: "Empty faces and hollow hearts / Venomous arrows and lethal darts" and"Your feeble excuse: you have no dime / To lend me from your small purse of time." Very original and clever imagery! The emotions are heartbeaking, too.

My only small complaint is that the last verse doesn't rhyme like the others, so it sorta breaks the flow at the end.

Sounds like the way I feel about the people who call themselves my friends. Good writing, keep it up.

I liked this poem a lot but hated the last line, it didn't fit, it cut the flow... toodles, please read, review. trippyangel