aw, wow, gawsh... another great song/poem.

i liked these lines:"Would you breathe me an icy kiss

Could you show me what I have missed

All the sunlight, shining upon me

Couldn’t deliver, couldn’t set me free"

well done. ^_^

i love the repitition, it really moves the poem along! good work and thanx for the review!

hmm.. I like the symbolism. (You were going for that, right?) lol.. sorry I'm poem dense.. I don't understand them very well. But this is really quite pretty. Sad, but pretty.

Wonderful poem, save for the language. It just didn;t really seem to fit. The repition of 'really i am just a child' works very well, and makes it a great poem. Brava.