Finally! Someone else who knows that Final Fantasy VII is the best.

Anyway...

Hmm, Well, I'd have to say that at the end of the second chapter, where they're talking, it's a litle confusing. I'd put in a few more "he said"s, personally.

And at the end, I think you meant 'heirs', not hairs. It did make me smile a little, though.

Good luck with the rest!

Thanks for the new chapter! I can't wait to see what happens to Meredith. This sounds very promising. So, keep up the good work.

Ah...so that's how it all started. Can't wait to hear the rest of this tale. I like it so far...keep spinning that thread my love.

PNEK MEKS

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Ying

You've got me interested. So keep writing... or you are a very cruel person indeed!

And you laughed at my chapter?? I hope that's the prolouge Yang! I've written shorter chapters that were more intertaining and mesmerising...no I haven't...* hates herself * Oh life is cruel! * sighs, and then again,a nd more itme for good measure * Well..I have to go put up the revisions for the prolouge and chapter one...bye bye Yang!!

PNEK MEKS

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Ying