absolutely lovely...great work!

Great, good structure and ryhme scheme. One of the few songs i have seen that have such a thing nowadays... Keep it up!

Nice. It really flowed, I like it, and I'm jealous that you can write poems that rhyme. it's a talent that I do not posess.thanks for the review-GoogleCorelli

"Every were" do you mean everywhere?

Anyway well written, but it does remind me of an AFI song (I can't remember what it's called!) I love the paradox "All the chances that I take, Help me to avoid the risks" - good.

-write on!

This pulls you in. Very interesting and ... brief yet profound.

Good work. Keep it up.

oh wow, nice. i'm guessing it has to do with drinking alcohol, right? (i could be wrong, knowing myself.) i've never drunk alcohol, unless you count wine for religious ervices, but i'm guessing it really takes you for a "trip". nicely done and expressed. ^_^