   gypsylass 2005-07-16 . chapter 3good first few chapter! your character development is moving right along, al well as the plot. nice job!! |
 xxPoPdAnCeRxx 2005-07-13 . chapter 1love it |
| xxPoPdAnCeRxx 2005-07-11 . chapter 3 hihihihi luv ur story!11 keep workking on it!! |
 Happiness's Deceit 2005-03-20 . chapter 3Aw...crush! SO kawaii(cute)... *glomps teddy bear* It makes me want to act like the freakily over-protective mother. |
| Happiness's Deceit 2005-03-20 . chapter 2 Jay sounds like he has a chemical problem in hs brain. He seems to be overreacting, but hey, fiction is supposed to be like that, ne? Great work! |
| Happiness's Deceit 2005-03-20 . chapter 1 Sounds fun, like your other story "Secret Star". OK! Great starter chapter! |
 arachibutyrophobia 2005-01-31 . chapter 3Poor Lily, I feel so bad for her... god all those shallow people ** me off. Jay's getting interested, right? hm... *thoughtful look* ~birdytamel~ |
| arachibutyrophobia 2005-01-31 . chapter 2 Sorry, I hate Jay, and adore Chris. Jay better make up for this or I'll...I'll...beat him up. Dunno how, but I will. lol.~birdytamel~ |
| arachibutyrophobia 2005-01-31 . chapter 1 You have great plots, but slow it down! I want to know more thoughts, more descriptions, more nuances!! |
 Star-Kid 2005-01-29 . chapter 3PLEASE HURRY AND UPDATE!Pwease? *sticks out lower lip* |
 twistedtruths 2005-01-16 . chapter 1Loved it. It really rocked. You are a really great writer. |
 A fan 2005-01-13 . chapter 3 WOW. NICE. REAL NICE. |
 Zeth-and-Kiwi 2005-01-05 . chapter 3Hm! Good chapter! It IS a bit dramatic n gloomy and all, but thassokay becuase you wrote it well! chiao!Z&K |
 The Silent Messenger 2004-12-22 . chapter 2Very creative idea... I like it. Keep up the fantastic work! |
 Elie Koyahama 2004-12-16 . chapter 2wow...drama...hehe jay did get kinda carried away =P though i can roughly guess, i wonder wat lily's life is like... nice work anyway^^ |
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