Wow! Very good! Judas is busy being gnawed to bits in the last circle of Hell, or so Dante says. He wouldn't appreciate this poem. ^^ The line "A sure-fire fate" is cool - the way you melt the "ure" sound into "ire" and then use alliteration with "fire" and "fate." The last line, while correctly conveying the attitude all Christians must have towards Judas, breaks the elegance of the bashing, however. Crude, ne? But over all, a good poem.

Mata ne!

~Tsukiyo

I like how you worded it. If the person didn't know about Judas though, they might be a little lost. But I like how you did it. Again, you say exactly what you mean in the few words that you put in there. Again, it's not too wordy. Great job.

A bit untrue since according to whatever, Jesus never hated Judas. New idea to get Jesus's take on the subject, but I don't think you captured what his emotions probably were (or for the believers, are) well.But I give you props for trying something different

What I find most amusing about this is that in your summary you say you wrote this in a religious mood. Assuming you're a Christian, that's rather hypocritical--taking pleasure in the pain and death of another. According to your doctrines, your savior forgives all, even the man who betrayed him to his death. Parts of this poem are confusing as well--the enjambment is sloppy and "sat in contemplate" should be "sat in contemplation." Also, the more dignified language you used throughout the poem is completely thrown off by the use of the word "bastard." I'm not condemning you for using a swear word, but it doesn't fit with the rest of the poem's language.

I really really like this poem. Keep up the good work :)