In the first line the phrase "glance on" seemed awkward. TO me glance is like a quick thing so you glance at something and look way. On sounds odd.

I like the piece though. I really liked the first stanza how you transition the scene from spring to summer was really great.

Oh wow I completely feel the same way. Very nostalgic piece. Keep writing! I hope you've been well.

~Anna~ ^_^

Really nice descriptions. I especially love the second stanza.

I LOVE the rhyming it's so awesome and your word choices are just so great. I like it a lot, really great job.

Love the words here. "lassitude, exactatude, splitter-splatter-plip-plop" those were awesome.

very true, nicely done.

Great descriptions.

The last line is really pretty. I like the personification in the first line too.

very nice... I like the descriptions

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i love the title - it's the first time i've seen the sunset described as a banana. XD

i wasn't too sure about the dashes in the last three lines... i don't quite know why they changed places or what they were really there for.

otherwise, great images and descriptions. good job. keep writing!

-Lefty

i like the contrast between the food and nature - it's an interesting take... and the food sounds good. XD

i also like the use of color - it makes the images vivid. :)

-Lefty

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interesting introduction - i liked the first paragraph because it made me think. :)

i think that this should be an author's note, though, rather than a chapter in itself... just because that's what it is. XD

-Lefty

I enjoyed this poem and found the title very appropriate. I'm not sure if its just fictionpress's formatting though but some of the lines are distracting with the dashes added in.

I really love the last two lines

I really love the second line of the second stanza.. the rest of it is great too