Wow! I loved this poem. great imagery. all my love-Tanaboo

disjointed, but neat, and a great reflection of how i used to feel about the world. don't forget the apostrophes in contractions. "won't" etc.

OH GOD! The last four lines were absolutely Amazing! They sent shivers down me spine. Even the holy orders line was aweosme. God you are defenitely a true poet, lol. So one of my favs!

WHOA! now this is powerful!~trw

He he like the last line. Like how twisted this seems but in a good way. Keep writing!

very good. I liked it. "Holy orders wont save you now."

Very powerful! Love it. Are you are a philosophy student, by any chance?

The flow might be a slightly choppy, but it is still enjoyable.

Say, the lack of a proper flow is the result of a few missing syllables in some of the lines?

Maybe adding a few of them in some parts might have the problem solved.

I like the way you present this, and conclude it with the phrase "All the first letters are disturbingly sane.". So there.

Thats cool, I like the acrostic I've tried to do them, but they always end up, realy stupid. I have one about my pice of $hit car! Hey, thanks for the review!

dark and disturbing. very effective and great. ~DS~

Really good stucture. And it flows very well. ^-^

~ Noelle ~

Hey, this is really good. Really good structure and it flows well.

*lime-girl*

wow...this was really well written. i mean, it's kinda depressing at points but it's very poetic and expresses a lot of imagery. good job. btw, thank you so much for reviewing my poem...i appreciate it!!

Wow, that's deep, very emotional. Really tells it as it is. Great job!(Wouldn't change a thing.)Keep writing!~K~

NIce, the chaos thoery. I love the title. I love your poem, it doesnt really need to rhyme but I understand how you feel and some of the words are so elborate.

keep it up *thumbs up*

peace,br8kin_d_habit