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Reviews For: Never Alone

Damaged 2006-05-19 ch 1,	abuse^_^ Beautiful poem! I really love the main them of this! Amazing! I wish I could write such tranquil poems!
Hanna M. 2006-04-23 ch 1, anon.	abuseYou are...an INCREDIBLE poet. I've always found that when I try to write poetry, It can either say what I want it to say, or it can rhyme. I can't do both. This poem and Do You? were my very favorites. I also love a quote from your profile: "Which is more real? One's given name or the name you give yourself?" You're so profound. Please keep writing.
ThatGirlInBlack 2005-07-17 ch 1,	abuseOh wow that was great! The rhyming was perfect. You have talent as you probably already know...
Tenika D 2005-07-03 ch 1,	abuseExcellent! The rythm of the whole thing is crisp, clean, and the rhyming is simple and perfect. I don't know if it was supposed to, but the whole thing made me smile. Well done. ~ TD
Hershey249 2005-06-23 ch 1,	abuseThat's simple, but I somehow like it anyway. I think it's the singsong rhythmic quality and the easy-to-read words, but this makes a very nice children's poem. I can't think of who would write exactly like this, the only thing I can think of is Shel Silverstein, if he were ever in a serious mood. Since he's not...eh, it'll come to me eventually. :P But the simplicity works for you here. In something with longer lines or such, it would look overly simplified, but you got it mostly right. There is one line where the rhythm is SLIGHTLY off, though, and that's the "All these are my friends." I know it's so ridiculously minor that most people wouldn't notice, but when you're going for that sing-song quality, you either have to hit it perfectly or it doesn't pull off. But that's probably really easy to fix. Overall, I like the sentiment. :)
Taka and Keichirou 2004-12-11 ch 1,	abusenice...could do with a bit more imagery to fully capture the scenery...but nice anywayT

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