A very clever counter to the falsely strong voice of the first half. Once more, it's difficult to tell if your original language is deliberately showing the distraught, unthinking agony, or just an error ("paining"? Really?)

Doesn't sound like you have the full effect as it is for a song... maybe a poem? I don't know... it's just, the chorus sounds a bit strange to me. Sorry if I sound offensive...!