This is such a cute little work. I think you should most definately revise it some time and make it more than a thousand words. I hate limits too. So annoying.

I just have one question. "Jalen stood with Ciara in his arms on the opposite side of the opening the two of them had jumped over once before." This sentence confused me just a bit. It seemed to me that you were implying that the two had fallen down together into the darkness, but then, wouldn't Jalen have known Ciara. Or maybe there was an action that my mind's eye missed or something. >

ooh interesting idea, i've always thought about falling up...really good katie =)