This is really good. I like it.

PS: Sorry it too me so long to read this.

One question: why would there be vitamin water and fuze in the refrigerator at falafel express when he graduated from high school? at least 10 years ago, vitamin water and fuze wasn't out yet then.

This is real good! Keep going!! Why did he black out?!?!

*yay*This is a really good first chapter. Its a little fast paced for me, but thats my own preferences. i only caught one mistake, and thats you spelled u-p "p". lol. i was like, what?anyhoo...can't wait for future chapters.

Because of security reasons, I refuse to disclose my real name. Now, first question: Pigskin? PIGSKIN? Sheesh, you are a football weirdo.

Haha, I like how you based your school setting on Hunter College High School. The plot seems very interesting and pretty creative. I look forward to seeing more later!

Hey girl! Looks really good so far. I don't know who Dr. Elliot is in the story but she sounded like a hoot! I'll be waiting for more!

Very nice work done. I like the way you've made the charecters real in this. Almost sounds like I listening to actual converstion.

aw that's pretty sweet! update soon!

Cute plot ^^ btw, your summary is very eye-catching. Kudos! anywho, hm... all I know is that Jarrod is hot but i have no description of him *tear* mm... that is all i have to say as for anything close to advice XD but it was a good start. I luv the character interaction, believable dialogue that shows the character. Curious to how everything will turn out! Happy writings!