Maybe its all just intentional for casual effect, but I thought the lack of capitalization and awkward phrasing e.g. "thank you not" was offputting and disrupted the flow. I thought the line breaks were interesting, but lacked a particular construction. Not enlightening, but insightful.

Nice write. I liked it.

I'm sorry. I'm sorry. I'm sorry. I'm sorry. I'm sorry. . I forgot all about your review. ;.;

*.* This was really good. ) Keep it up.

Noelle

interesting poem. i will be honest-i didnt really understand it one bit. but what i did get out of it i liked.