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| DarkRose1593 2008-09-16 ch 1,   | This poem is beautiful. It truly illustrates life and is so deep. |
| Justin Vengeance 2008-09-12 ch 1, | I enjoy reading your things. I'm going to start on your book I see soon. I think in this one, since everything is capitalized that you should use commas but I don't think its essential for it to be effective (because it is), just part of my horrible ocd, haha. |
| RavenTiger 2008-09-10 ch 1, | Another wonderful poem. Your sister is very talented writer. :D Peace. |
| half-sketched.staccatos 2007-10-06 ch 1, | konban wa Demoralizing, I must say. But the imagery was fantastic. May I ask why YOU are posting your sister's piece and not your sister herself? Or is that a question too personal? If I'm prying, feel free to virtually slap my across the face. *grin* I'm used to it, LoL. Zaijen -Shan- |
| life on rewind 2007-10-03 ch 1, | Oh, I love this! I love the meaning behind it ... your little sister must be a brilliant poet! Punctuation. It expresses places where you want the reader to pause and helps with flow and metre. If you dislike using punctuation, I respect that, but if you’re open to comments then maybe you should consider this one! Maybe you could format the poem into stanzas and remove the double spacing? It's a bit long otherwise, and reading it gets tedious. Thank you for posting this! Maybe you wouldn’t mind checking out a few of my writings too if you feel like it and liked the review? If you do, I recommend my rants. I hope the concrit helped! Sakura. [Yes, I copy/paste most of my reviews. So sue me. The concrit changes per review, and you get tips, right? Win/win situation. End of.] |
| .following.black.doves. 2007-09-29 ch 1, | love it ;) srz |
| DiaRose 2007-09-28 ch 1, | Very nice imagery, and symbolism! Love, ~Dia |
| Lavender Dylan 2007-09-15 ch 1, | People may say that this poem is cliche but whatever I thought this poem was beautiful :) I loved the way she ended the poem. Good Job |
| smile for the sunshine 2007-09-15 ch 1, | I kinda like this. It's rather pretty. The perspective was nice. |
| wildcard07 2006-05-03 ch 1, | true, true. i love the flow of it.:) |
| daphnegray78 2005-08-06 ch 1, | Hey! ^_^ Out of curiousity, what happened to "If My Love Could be Dissolved?" I received the Author Alert and finally went to R&R it, when it said the story was not found. *shrugs* I was just wondering what happened. Anyhoo, I'll talk to you later. Have fun. ;) ~Daphne~ |
| Moonjava 2005-08-02 ch 1, | That is so lovely. I like it. |
| Mercury Angel II 2005-07-19 ch 1, | I liked it. It's a beautiful poem. |
| J.Dem 2005-07-08 ch 1, | This poem describes life rather well, I ussually compare life to football or hockey but im jock so hey what else is there, but comparing to a rose is very new to me and well done btw. Please R&R |
| The Magician (Joseph 2005-07-02 ch 1, | Your sister really outdid herself, this is a really good poem, nice and short, but thought provoking.Nice job Joseph |