beautiful pretty whimsical hallucination i want more. -kismet.

I loove this one. The ending was great, awesome write ;)

This is absolutely elegant. I love it. Although I caught the references, it reminds me more of Snow White than Alice. The last four lines were very creepy and so wonderful! I adore the surreal and slightly twisted atmosphere the entire piece creates. It is very mood depictive. Only critique is that you used the word "pretty" in both line 1 and line 4. Muchly loved "she is the crow’s feet you don’t have", amongst many others. Amazing work!

- Cheers, Mindy

God! I'm stunned at this. It was great. Truly great. Kudos all the way, I loved every line of it.

I think it was beautiful and well written. Liked the mention of coffe'but the smell of french vanilla won’t wake her up'