I like this. I loved the description and the plot has great potential. However, you use a bit too much passive voice. Pathetic? No. I wouldn't call this pathetic at all.

A new story! W00t-ness. _

Wow. That's really cool. I like the name. This is gonna be cool. n_n

Yesh, I like it. I'd have to see how the story unfolds to see if I like the name. But it sounds cool so far. Yay!

Hm...interesting. You'd better not drop Greava. And you'll be happy to know that Andy wrote SIX PAGES of GOTU today! Doesn't that make you happy? Oh, and good write...this is interesting. Love the descriptive images.