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| JustAnotherLibroLover 2008-08-20 ch 13,  | abuseYAY! LOVED IT! |
| Hazelnut-Romance 2008-08-18 ch 13, | abusevampire romance! |
| Demeterr 2008-06-21 ch 13, | abuseAh. Nice ending. Hmm.. I looked around at your other stories.. I remember you had two other stories related to this. One was of that girl mentioned in the first chapter.. and the other was ... -mind blank - .. May I ask what happened to those stories? |
| Demeterr 2008-06-19 ch 2, | abuseOmgish wow. I think I read this story YEARS ago. And I loved it!! Reading through it now... it sounds so familiar. Can't believe I managed to find it by sheer chance after my attempts to search for it failed before. Eagerly reading the rest of it now. |
| Birds and Boats 2008-05-20 ch 13, | abusehey i like the staory, but i could use a rewrite, uhm, this is my second time reading it, and i remember there being like a sequel, about the with going after the human. I liked that one too, but it seems to have disapeared... |
| me 2007-10-06 ch 13, anon. | abuseur an amazing author and this is an amazing story ... i really think u deserve a LOT more reviews than u currently have |
| Kathleen Moon 2007-05-02 ch 13, | abuseI absolutely loved this story, so well written, and while it was short, it moved at a fantastic pace and ended very well...I love Kane! |
| Chiclets 2006-10-26 ch 13, | abuseOh, this is so sweet. I think I was always disillusioned under the fact that a good story would be around 25 chapters, but, people seem to be proving me wrong again and again. I suppose that's a good thing. I like Kane...I like this story. Yup. Going on the favourites list, it is. Thank you for a good read, and write on! |
| live-life 2006-09-04 ch 14, | abuseWOW! I am in absolute LOVE with this story! i couldn't leave my computer! I think that you're an amazing author who's got tons of talent. I was wondering what the story that's related to this one is called...or is going to be called if it's not out yet...I'm going to go and re-read this story now ^_^ it's just so good! |
| Kelly 2006-08-12 ch 4, anon. | abuseHihi! Just wanted to mention you should try to stop describing the happenings of the story so frankly. Ex- 'Krista shut up. They slowly made there way up the staircase.' While 'Krista shut up.' is short and sweet enough, what followed it made the story seem bland. Plus, it would only work if you were to have that after more flowery/flowing language than what was before it. Speech that flows more smoothly for the majority with only a bit of choppy statements here and there is generally favoured in stories. |
| Kelly 2006-08-12 ch 14, anon. | abuseHihi! Great story! I'd like to read about Gabriel, but I can't find it! *tear* |
| StrawberryStarburst 2006-05-09 ch 1, | abuseAww, that was a sweet story. Maybe you can do a sequel...? |
| Aria Deloncray 2006-02-28 ch 14, | abuseI love this story. I liked how you showed the interaction between Kane and Krista. Also how you explained the characters backround and the world they lived in. One thing I think would make it better is showing how she learned to trust Kane. You kinda skipped to where they were friends without explaining. I think it would be a lot harder for Krista to accept Kane as a person and not the monster she thought he was. Overall I think it is a great story. |
| joank 2006-02-06 ch 14, | abuseCool story. I'll be after the sequel the moment I click the submit review button. |
| Vivian LeFaye 2005-09-14 ch 14, | abuseI loved this story. you are awesome! Kane rocks, I want to meet him :(. Such a shame he isnt real... Krista was cool too. |