Wow this is great! I was gonna write a poem with an Ace of Hearts in it...never got around to doing it, but this is brilliant! I love how it develops and how the ending is different from the beginning...great job! Love, Mia

Oh, the ending was so harsh! But he deserved it. Ha. I like very much. The bitterness was so carefully restrained until that last stanza. Wonderful. Typo in withdrawl(2nd line, stanza 5), maybe, and in "There's an two of Hearts in you" an should be a? Loved the card metaphor, and how you used "palm" to continue it. I liked the "darlin'" and the "crazy karma-kickin' drug". The abbreviations made it seem more realistic and like it happened to a real person. The last stanza, like I said, was awesome. It changed the topic and imagery from slightly stereotypical to quite original. Great work!

hmm this isn't like your usual writings Heather, I've seen better but I like the idea of this one. Just could use some touch ups I think.

Jenna xoxo

There's an two of Hearts in you,.. a

Interesting concept.. Im quite sure i get the whole card thing, but I love the part about the palm... very nicely done

*cries* this is really good. going through a break up right now, i suppose this is what it's going to be like when i get through it. ~jenny~