This is so sad. I love it!

I think this is the best one yet! Funny how it always goes, normally, that the last thing you wrotes always best? Or possibly maybe not that strange. Any who, the reason its so good that's what your after I guess.

Well I think it's mostly down to the repition, both physical and phenetic (damn I wish could spell that word). This has caused the rythum to develop natraly, although 'defeatest' doesn't quite fit into this but I can't think of any other word and the thesaurus (annother word I can't spell, any body would think a pattern was forming)isn't very helpful.

Again this poem is highly emotive. And just so you know ever since I was bullied, people are scary as hell!

Catch ya soon peep!

Amazing. I applaud the fact that you did a brillant job of explain quite a few of my emotions! Very well written, and truthfully amazing. Very strong, very true... very real. Stick with it, and you'll be more then just a poet.