this is a beautiful and sad poem. I liked it because it was not the typical everyday, run-of-the mill kind of poem about love and death and hate (not that I don't like those). Very creative. Way to use your poetic skills in a new, different light.

That was so sad. But amazing. Very well written, but still really sad. And the ending was perfect. My favorite line was "Mary-Jane’s hair hangs low". I do that a lot. It just reminded me of myself. Very good work, keep writing!

Wow. Do whatever you can to track down whoever originally said that on the train and give them a big hug 'cause this is awesome. 3

That's scary... I know too many people that behave like MaryJane for that not to hit home. I myself usually wear my hair over my face. Incredible, I can't believe you write this well. My poetry pales in comparison to yours.

You're good at drawing out sympathy. Very good overall.

Tragically beautiful. I consider you a very talented writer, and I hope you continue writing.

aw. that really sad. very deep and touching poem. very well written. i LOVED it!

another great poem. you're work is really good!

Very nice form, I love the short sentences, they have power in them. PS, your pen name rocks!

Very sad and emotional.

Wow! Mary Jane reminds me of me!