If you ever think about giving up on this story I shall force you to keep writing on this storiy until you end up like Keith and I mean it! Anyway let me tell you something when you read your own works they seem like crap happened when you were sleeping but to other people it sounds really good. Same applies here if your think that way...but fear not I like this story and I like the way you write it(although there are a few spelling mistakes but I am a very scattered brain person so I can't say where right now...)your quick-and-snappy style of writing keeps the story going and keeps the drama and romance up to the edge.Keep writing this way I like it!

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I'm really enjoying reading this story. It would be good if you included a bit more history of the characters and why the teacher hates Kit.

On a positive note, it's good to see a story that tackles the issues of homophobics and just how stupid they are :P. Your style of writing is good, you just need to check spelling and grammar.

Looking forward to your further writings,

-=Sir MatikuS=-

Ok... nevermind about that thoughts thing. It would be much better if you laid out her thoughts like someone was looking into her brain, not her thinking outside her brain.Twice, you used coarse instead of course.Kit's dad is a little creepy, but it would add to the effect better if he 'looked' more freaky.Nice.

Finish the story!What is that word that the mother calls Keith that starts with br? I'm so confused. And this is gonna stick with me until I find out... so write write write!There is too much talking. But for some odd reason, everytime I come up with something that I want you to change, it comes up in the next chapter... what's up with that?The thoughts... they still don't explain much. I liked it. Please continue!

YAY! Discriptions!Yeah... whose the teacher who hates you for no apparent reason?Keith seems to me like someone I know... I'm a skimmer, so I didn't get all the full details of the story, but I think it is pretty good. You got to explain more about how Kit feels; looking into her brain or something. I won't understand any way else.

Well... I feeling really sorry for Keith right now, so I really want to continue reading... Whatever happened to Mrs. Hair-discriber? I'm in the second chapter and hardly know what anyone looks like, how big the school might be, or basically anything! Discriptions!

YO! That was real nice... You repeatedly spelled minute wrong, and Kit seems to be uncaring and heartless, because she did nothing to help Keith, and you didn't include dramatic screams or fits of anger. Other than that, I liked it.

great story Kieth is like Cinderella with all those chores.. Its soo sad .. Well I hope that Kit becomes nicer to him.. Update soon!

Amber, great chapter! Keiths mom is a big ** and I hope she dies! Lol...sorry getting to into the story. But is it really keiths mom or is it someone else. It seems to me like there is something going on. Well make sure to update this soon! Call me later. Bye bye Amber!

Amber I like how this story is turning out! Its really interesting...I dont really like reading as you probably already know. But if its a good story Ill read it thats just how I am I guess. Your a very talented writer and I hope you take that to your advantage!

You have a pretty good story line so far. The only thing I really have to say is that I hope you put some more depthness into your characters soon. Overall though it's very good.

You really need to work on backstory and motivation. The writing is okay, although it could use some work, but the whole scene in the classroom doesn;t make any sense. We don't understand WHY Mrs. Clifton doesn't like her--or why, if she is African-American, she doesn't agree that there is still prejudice. Also, the "punishment" is not very logical--in any normal school, teachers would not be allowed to do something like that. You need to make it a little more realistic.I also don't know about where you go to school, but at any school I've been at, thirteen year olds don't have majors. Especially if Keith is homeschooled, it makes no sense to say that he is a history major.I get the sense that you're just trying to set the scene up for Kit and Keith to spend the time together, but it is very rushed and inconsistent. If you want to write a good story, you need to make sure everything clicks from the get-go.

This is really good so far!I've only just beun and i'm totally hooked! Keep up the good work!

Amber! This is great! Standing novation *stands up and claps*! I really like how the story is going. But its really upsetting because man... how can people be so homophobic..DAMN BASTARDS! Well finish this damn story or I will surely kill over... call me today!