Hmm...rather long names, but it's a nicely done scene! I can imagine the last lines of flying off with the dragon.

This story looks very good so far. You displayed a great amount of detail, and everything showed up clearly in my mind. The only thing I didn't like so far was the names. They were much too long, but I'm sure I'll get used to it.You are very promising as a writer, and I really like this story. Thumbs up!

Kinda cool. I liked. It was well written and descriptive.

Maybe you should alter characters etc. and make them your own. I'd like to see where this could go.

Sam

liven...hard to remember the name pal...but

the fiction's very flowery and mystical like the LOTR stuff..it's great the way you portrayed it man.!