Brilliant. :-) This is turning out to be a highly amusing and engaging story...

Brilliantly fun, and very well written. :-) I look forward to reading more!

I have to admit: this is one of those hidden jewels on this site. It's very nicely written and hardly any spelling mistakes, which I worship you for.

I love the original plot, and the way you write it really makes me feel like you are Jacob, as if you know all that he knows of these things, which (even if he is supposedly the worst cadet) is a hell of a lot! It's always nice to read things by an author who knows what s/he is doing.

There are a few things that I've wondered about reading this far (and as I haven't read your other reviews, I don't exactly know if these have been mentioned (and frankly, I'm lazy and can't be bothered checking).

Also, this is off the top of my head and I can't remember all that I've wondered about during the course of reading your story, but these are the ones I remember:

If they're so used to saying the time as "0500" hours, then why, when they get to DC, do they say it differently? (Oh wait, now that I think about it, they're undercover, so it makes sense. Sorry, my bad.)

Can they buy things at the facility? If not, in this chapter (9), Adrian says:

"As for myself, you wouldn’t believe the number of gifts I get every Christmas, from all those boys that are after me back at the facility. I have an entire trunk filled with the jewelry back home."

Now, I swear I have the worst memory out of the people I know, and I'm pretty positive that there were more things I wanted to check up on... but I can't remember, and as I said before, I'm lazy and can't be bothered checking!

Anyway, your story is wonderful. I love how the characters are developing so far, and your details are superb (especially of the action)! And I know I said this up the top, but... your grammar and spelling rock!

Good story, Stephentchel. I hope I spelled your name right.

Some very good characters, despite a little ripping from the already existing Love Hina series, yet you've managed to make them your own and not just a carbon copy. I find myself liking Jacob, mostly because of how you tell the story from his point of view so well and how his character is so animated, inner-monologue-wise.

I find the bits of humor both very funny and witty, which in my opinion, is the best kind of comedy.

You keep the story quite realistic, intriguing, funny, compelling, and introspective. Though, there are some parts are a little long-drawn-out that I find the want to skip a few lines a little. This is just a matter of personal opinion, however.

All in all, I'm very impressed with your story. I'd give it a solid 8/10 if I could rate it. It's only an 8 for now since you have yet to show more of the story.

Keep up the good work.

Caelius

Wow. Kind of creepy, the way Denise says that. Her rants have always been an expected source of amusement but now, I can't help but shudder at the last comment she said.

I love your story. The action, the humor, the romance (though sometimes I'm not even sure which girl he likes, Amy or Sarah, but I'm betting on Sarah even though, like in this chapter, he feels a kindred spirit in Amy) and everything else about the story.

Hope you update soon!

Mia

OH MY! What has it been a year 2? Whatever, it's been welcome back.

Oh OUCH!

Nice work with the action sequences- I particularly really loved your description of the cursing. ;)

Awesome work- update soon!

Erisah

Do you WANT me to commit suicide? T_T Finish your story...please! Wah...oh wait...another chapter! Whoops...but it's only one...*sniff* Please resume soon!

Hehe this is so cool! I wouldn't worry so much about the feminist issues (that you explained in your author note,) so far, so good, as far as I'm concerned... a few details edge on that, but most of the girls are kickass enough to be able to beat the hell out of the males who might doubt their capabilities, so it balances out.

I love this character of yours- definitely the embodiment of lovable loser- but you HAD to have him fall for the cliche blonde femme fatale, didn't you? Oh well, nothing's perfect.

By the way, in case i haven't suggested this yet, I consider this story to be bloody hilarious!That part where the Major is trying to tell Jacob about the facility being full of telepathswas a serious crack up!

So, all in all, This is fun, original, and definitely catching a place on my favourites list. Update soon!

Erisah

It took me three days to read this entire thing...and now...dude...FINISH IT! Please _

I've just finished a marathon reading session of this story, and I'm amazed. Stories of this quality are very rare anywhere, let alone on this site. The girls from Team Alpha could easily have come across as bitchy Mary Sues, but you managed to make them feel human with human vulnerabilities. You have a very good grasp of everthing that makes up a good story - characters, dialogue, plot, setting, pace, etc.

However, one thing struck me as I read your story: I thought I was reading a very good science-fiction story, not one associated with manga. You have a lot of (perfectly necessary and legitimate) details and background to explain, and I wonder how this could be achieved with manga, which I've always seen as a primarily visual medium.

I wonder if this is why your story has, relatively speaking (and considering its high quality), few reviews.

I really like this story. I think the whole genetically engineered human thing rocks. I'm a robot, so we're practically cousins! Anyway, I hope you update soon. I can't wait to see what Jacob does next.

Cordially,

General Disarray

I love the plot of the story! It's great!

Hey... I just finished reading chapter 16 ) Good stuff, man... I think it shows a real spark of creativity ) Just wondering... will this story be updated? Or have you discontinued it?