Nice and its flows good to a tragic ending.

"The twisting curls/of your blonde,/and my genetics… how?" - I like this line, it made me smile.=) Thnx for sharing.

Hmm...interesting ways of description. I like how you weave in and out.

Also, about my DBQ essay, I don't know if it deserves an 8/9 or not but I just thought I'd say that the beginning DOES contain a thesis and the majority of it is FACT with STORYTELLING sprinkled in. I don't know, but I believe my AP teacher when he says that it's good except that I used too many documents and it's too long. You can email me about it if you want, but...I just thought I'd say that, in my own defense and the defense of my teacher.

Good luck w/ all your school stuff.

hey Steph! yAy! a NEW poem! *heart fills with warm milk*

This was so good! Very powerful! Wonderful overall! I should just say "w00t!" and move on!

The wording and line structure were awesome, kept me moving all the way to the end.

The images, emotional resonance ... succulant! lol

yAyness!