Beautiful :-)

Hello luv! You know who it is :)

The title of the poem compelled me to read it, and I'm rather glad I did. The language is simple, easy to relate to; but the poem is fabulous! I can def imagine observing the girl from far away. Eh ^_^ I love your writing and

...omg.

OMG.

OMG!1infinity

Speechless, really, your best one yet. I can completely see her, I love love love 'blue lips and fingertips', and 'half-scenes' and 'heart street' and "That dance in the wind as if they're burnt ashes" OH MY ** GOD AUGH. So not-trite or cliche, even though it's writing about cliches and and and AH

Beautiful image of the girl in the poem. As though watching her from a distance. So far one of the best poems I have read tonight. I love the line, "The dance in the wind as if they're burnt ashes." Awsome metaphor...great write.

groovy, groovy, groovy. I love the subtle rhymes. Wish I could rhyme like that. Heh. I like how original this poem is. It has a very unique voice. Keep writin'!

good in itself. i think maybe you shouldn't have rhymed in so perfect intervals. (yes, i realize that most of my things do, but i'm to the point where it's better if it flows well.) that's the only problem i have with it. my favorite line is 'simple and plain- probably emo, too-'. don't know why. i like emo people. good poem. if i didn't like it, i wouldn't be reviewing.