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| no.peace.los.angeles 2006-06-13 ch 1,  | abuseFor the most part, I really liked this. The rhyme scheme worked well, your descriptions are great, and the verbs you chose are wonderful. One thing I wasn't a fan of is the line "Love is the same in 2004." That just left a bad taste in my mouth. I prefer for poems to be timeless, and this one kinda takes that away. There are lots of other words that rhyme with more - choose one of those and you'll be fine. Keep writing! :) |
| Charity F 2005-10-08 ch 1, | abuseWOW!! this was lovely and utterly amazing...i just LOVE your structure here - very cool girl, very cool... well, what else can i say? yiou have some incredible talent girl, and i can't wait to read more from you! |
| Renada 2005-04-05 ch 1, | abuseI liked this one mucho. It flowed really well and it was such a simple topic written wonderfully. Good goin'! ^_^ Ren |
| WarriorHeart 2005-04-04 ch 1, | abusebeautiful. |
| Antique Murder 2005-04-02 ch 1, | abusei really really liked the poem unti the 2004 part. not the stanza, just that line. im not trying to be mean, but it takes away from the ethreal quality of the rest of the poem. the sound of the poem is more timeless than modern or anything, so 2004 seems out of place and takes away fromt he poem a bit. otherwise i liked it. good job. |
| dustytiger 2005-03-13 ch 1, | abusethis is great you are very talanted writer, the way you worded it and it flowed was beautiful, |
| fadedrainbows 2005-02-07 ch 1, | abuseThis, too, is a wonderful poem. I really enjoyed the story, and the flow was awesome! Great job! ~*~Fadedrainbows~*~ |
| AllyCred 2005-02-01 ch 1, | abusethis is beautiful...i have to say i love it...flows amazingly well and its just simply great. lots of love ~AllyCred~ |
| Im/the/ONE 2005-01-16 ch 1, | abuseOoh I love it!I also think The Last Dance is really good too.Thanks for reviewing me I really appreciate it...but I must hurry because I'm going to read the rest of your poems! |
| The System Mother 2005-01-16 ch 1, | abuseWow, this is really cool. I like how you wrote it sort of from the snowflake's point of view. Interesting read. |
| Twilit Exaggerance 2005-01-11 ch 1, | abusei'm speechless. This is really good. Never read anything quite like it. Really like the last line |
| kiran 2005-01-03 ch 1, anon. | abusewow that was pretty good!! what an interesting way in comparing a snow flake to other aspects. usually this type of poetry is hard to write but u have done an awesome job! thanx a bunch for the review it meant alot to me!! -kiran |
| hocsll 2004-12-23 ch 1, | abusehmm..really good, but the phrase 'Snow-capped peaks, rolling hills that are brown' sounds quite **...the 'that are' seem to stick out :P other than that, i really enjoyed this poem...i could really picture the snowflake and all...breathtaking! |
| swift sky silver 2004-12-22 ch 1, | abusei really love the descriptions and imagery you used here. nice job. keep writing =0) |
| a e i o u and sometimes y 2004-12-21 ch 1, | abuseOoh, I like it. You've got such beautiful descriptions and the whole thing equals a pretty elegance that plays out in your mind. keep it up. |