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Eirien 2004-12-30 . chapter 1
Lovely concept and nicely written. It's true that often we try to deal with our pain by clothing it into fantasy, or clothing it into language, imagery etc. The rhymes work nicely, though I would avoid the repetition of "over me" in the third-last and last line. Still, I really like this poem.
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