O.O wow. i really liked this poem. it was so sad. especially since i once felt that way.-cries- anyways...great poem and greatdisplay of the meaning and emotions.

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aww thats so sweet i love it T.T so sad

sad and deep, its very well written! its a pretty poem!

YOU NEVER TOLD ME YOU WERE IN LOVE!anyway, it really touched me. nice one!

+-nice one! (thx for the r&r) Keep writing, plz!!;)

very very good. I like your longer poems better. they seem more flowy and less choppy. Very good.

Hm... Reading your works now. (You sure write alot! ^_^ And well, too, may I add. Heh. That's the "reward" you get for just giving one review! Hehe!) Anyway! I loved this poem, too, how you slowly and gradually made it a sad poem instead of just jamming everything there in the beginning. However, I think the effect would increase if you do a bit more paragraphing. For example:

Gazing at the starlit sky

My lips breathe out a silent sigh

Of only you knew what was on my mind

Then maybe, perhaps, fate would’ve been kind

Could be:

Gazing at the starlit skyMy lips breathe out a silent sighOf only you knew what was on my mindThen maybe, perhaps, fate would’ve been kind

And then you go to the next paragraph like that. I don't know, but I think poems like these should be paragraphed that way (I'm not saying I'm experienced or anything, but that's how I've seen it so far. ^_^;;)

But other than that, I loved this poem! Again, keep writing!

~Kaze of the Sand

Very nice, very sad. A bit weak in some parts, but nice!