Wow, this is a very interesting story! Your charries are unusual (in a good way) and the story plot seems orginial. Post more and I'll read more!

Wow! Great story, great writing, but most of all, an amazingly consistent and real character. Thorr is just funny enough to seem human-or doppelganger, or whatever you'd call him. Unfortunately, I have no criticism or advice but to keep doing what you're doing. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.