aw... This was so cute!

Aw... that's so sad... All I could think of when I read this one was the main chorus to Linkin Park's Song "Numb"
Here it is:
I've become so numb,
I can't feel you here,
Become so tired,
so much more aware,
I'm becoming this,
all I want to do,
is become more like me,
and be less like you,

Anyways, Nice story. I can see a continuation though.

L e e

very sweet

aww thats sweet!

Very good. I liked the switching from POV to POV.

That was SO cute! I'm in love with Jared.

Love it

Holy **, I really really really love this. I wish it wasn't a one-shot, even when I usually like one-shots more because when people write more and more about characters they tend to get boring or have sudden personality changing.But oh **. I really really liked this.. while I think you could've done more with depth on Blake's part, I think it's fine as it is since you were writing it from their persepctive. This just makes me so sad and happy at the same time. I love the repetition of Jared's analysis of Blake's smiles and how he feels about them.

I liked that story. Very cute. ^_^

Wow! That was so moving! I love the change of POVs between Jared and Blake, it makes the story even more interesting. We can see how they get closer, little by little, and how Jared finally wants to live on. And Blake too finds a meaning to his life. On a side note, I like how Jared was fascinated by "Pretty Eyes". Well, it was really a beautiful story, I'm glad you shared it with everybody. Keep up the great work!

I loved this too! Damn it, you two write such awesome stories! (Clings) And the boys are always sexiness-es! XD

Morbid Maxwell-Come to the darkside, we've got yaoi!

I like the story. It's nice. I was a bit confused as to whether you were continueing or not, but I think you should because it'd be a really good story... I've rambled long enough so I'll stop now.

Aww! That is the cutest story I've read in a long time! I love it! Makes me want to cry. But one thing, I know this was a one shot, but it would be really nice if you continued, i'd like to know about the background of their lives, you know, get to know them better cuz although it was really good, I think it would be better if it were more drawn out and not all squished into one little ficlet. So, yeah, just some thoughts. :)

Hi! *Waves* I already read it before, but shall review anyway. It was lovely. Really cute. Poor Jared, since he got beat up, at least he met Blake. Anywho, glad you posted it. *Grins*

You don't plan to continue this? I hope you do. It's a great start!