well i liked the poem. not your best but its still good. and i was just gonna say that a sonnet has a different rhyme scheme ^ ^;;well anyway i shall go read your ozer stuff

You try too desperately to rhyme. This really isn't a very good poem. Most of your poems aren't very good. You should stick to stories, you're good at those. Your bio is really lame, by the way.

wait! I get it! It's about bleach, huh? YOu must be a hippy! I get it!