this is omi's older brother. When i was introduced to your writing (albeit reluctantly), i saw potential. now, i see talent. You do have talent, boy. Write more, but more importantly, read more. Read the right books, and you will find your writing improving by, cliched as it might seem, leaps and bounds. The Force is strong with this one.

you pull off a cliched plot with a magic touch. love the style. -kismet.