I say "darkness" fits better here, because you're trying to keep it childlike. "Twilight" seems a little too sparkling for the simple message you're trying to get across.
I like this one, too.

wow, i like it alot, especially this phrase: "like snow-spangled strands of silk". it was very descriptive in a not-annoying way. ya know?

and anyway, i think "darkness" would be better than "twilight" but that's okay, my opinion doesn't really matter. *cheery smile*

i look forward to reading your great poems of faith.

Darkness is more descriptive... Twilight is more "flashy" :-P Tough choice.

The poem is really awesome... Touching and sad. The split in the poem really helps to show the conflict and especially that last line in the first stanza showing the shift.

It's an open poem with a question that has filled my own heart so often. It's a constant journey to get back there, but possible (and no, I'm not usually an optimistic one... I've really seen this happen). It just starts with one small step in faith.

... I think "Twilight" would have made a better touch. =) Its still good thugh, I really like it actually. ^-^ Reminded me of "Evnescence", I really enjoy the band. ^-^ Beautiful poem, flowed well and was just well done. ^-^ =)

!~* Noelle *~!

i like twilight better... Again, its a bit Evanescent, but I love that band, so thats all good with me. :P

beautiful, I like the idea of "twilight"

I like the word darkness in the last line the best. I also like the contrast in the two stanzas, the first is talking about the child and her perfect faith and then the next is about you wanting that faith but not being able to find it. You can still have the faith of a child though.

Oh, how cute! I think darkness sounds better than twilight... I don't know why but to me twilight still sounds so friendly and comforting. Nice poem, the second part really sounds a bit like Fields of innocence.

Great poetry here.. how you compared a child's faith with the faith of an older person... I think twilight would be better.

I thought this poem was really good. I love the messge behind it. I think twillight at the end works a little better than darknes cause I think it adds a little bit, but darkness can work just as well. You're the author so it's really up to you. Anyway great poem. I liked it alot.