Whoa. You are... amazing. I could hear the music to it in my head... And it was sweet. Very, very good!

i rEmEmBeE dA daI u r0tE DiS uP. i wAs wAtchIn u oUt oF mAi wInd0w. u wrote dIs bUt DeN u g0t stuck. i waNTed t0 hElP y0u n l0vE y0u. BUt mAI gUrlFrIeNd wOUld hAvE g0tTeN mAd dAt i hAdN't t0lD hEr i wAS wAtcHiN j00.

i wATch j00 AlL da tYmE. i dInk j00 r HAwTdAyUm.wOUld j00 lYk t0 bE mAi ** or hO?

we cOuLd hAve hoUrs oF fuN doIn thIngs.

Hits so close to home. Reminds me of my own love life. How we can't always be the hero we want to be. Awesome song. I really enjoyed it.~Hawke

This, is good. Good job, very powerful, seems like a great song.

This rocks. I'm glad that you finally got it up without any trouble, that stupid ** who tried to get it taken down before was just jealous because he could never write anything as awesome as this! :D

That is so powerful. The end is sad, really deep and meaningful. I loved reading it!

hey! OMGsh, I was so excited to see you review, lol. Long time no chat, huh? And I logged in to review you, too, so I think we're even. :-P Anyways, I didn't think I remembered this poem... but then I kept reading and I think I do. Unless I'm just making it up(?). So anyways, about this! I love the emotion you put into this... It's like regret, and somewhat self loathing, not wanting to be yourself, and putting others before you. It was damn sad, but it was also damn good (and one of my resolutions was to stop swearing so much! Lol)! It reminds me of the song "Broken" with Seether and Amy Lee. This poem/ (song?) was really great!

PS- Glad u told me to review, I loved it, and if u ever want my feedback please put it in a review or if u've already reviewed everything of mine and it won't let u review again (cuz it doesn't, lol) ~ you can e-mail me cuz I'm sure I'd love to read it!

WOW The only word needed.I don't really like songs but this one has changed my mind. {One less item to read yea! Closer to my goal} Great Job.~Kaylee~

Still love, can still completely relate, and YAY FOR YOU! WOOT! :)

Wow. I really enjoyed this. Singing it to myself it came out as rap mostly, sounded great. I can see it as seriously being a great song. One suggestion- in the first stanza the last two lines didn't seem to flow to me, but hey, I don't exactly have great rythym. Anyway, I've rambled enough. Great work, as usual, Cinnamon

Yay! I like it. It better stay on FP now. :) I'm off to read your other poem now. -Jackie

I love it...reminds me of Linkin Park-ish...very good...very,very sad...it makes me think of smeone who I knnow...his best friend (who was a girl) got hit by a drunk driver right in front of him...this makes me think of him...its a very good song. Good job.

Alice

Handstands and kisses, mommy can I have a pony pretty please?

I can so relate. Awesome song! You must sing it to me! Lol

Wow, very deep and dark. The emotions... are incredible... great job.

*Silent Writer*

i love it.. its so sad