it's so realistic...well, for being based off a dream. it's so unique and characteristic. you linger on each description making a few seconds seem longer, just like in every dream anyone has every had. very very good.

very touching...and THANK YOU for your recent reviews! It's nice to see a past reviewer come back. Thanks again!

i rEmEmBeE dA daI u r0tE DiS uP. i wAs wAtchIn u oUt oF mAi wInd0w. u wrote dIs bUt DeN u g0t stuck. i waNTed t0 hElP y0u n l0vE y0u. BUt mAI gUrlFrIeNd wOUld hAvE g0tTeN mAd dAt i hAdN't t0lD hEr i wAS wAtcHiN j00.

i wATch j00 AlL da tYmE. i dInk j00 r HAwTdAyUm.wOUld j00 lYk t0 bE mAi ** or hO?

we cOuLd hAve hoUrs oF fuN doIn thIngs.

tis is so honest, but still so emotive. i love it.

*sniffs* That's so sad... the one last moment to be together. It always hurts. Wonderful work. Keep it up.~Hawke

OMG! its so true. The truth hurts and I'm dealing with that. You are very descripitive. I wish you more luck with writing. Keep doing a great job.

def. a future artist! I can see tht!! gr8 job.

aw, I love it! So sweet! *sniffles* It's much more romantic than this song, but it reminds me of the "Save Tonight" song... "Save tonight, fight the break of dawn, (something??) tomorrow, tomorrow I'll be gone..." That song always makes me cry, and this was going to, too. Touching, and lovely! Great work, and as always *write on*!

This is so touching. So pleading!I love it!

Wow, this is great and it's really sweet! Good descriptions too! I really like this one :D

very nice. in the middle there was kinda these random 4 lines that rhymed and a lot of the time stuff that rhymes doen't really work but you made it do so! loved it!

After looking at your website... this is a complete switch from that. lol! I love it. Thanks so much for reviewing me and I will get done reviewing yours ... eventually. lol. ~Kaylee~

YAY! You're writing again! I'm thrilled! :) thanks, btw, for your review on my Ian/Kayla songs. They were muchly appreciated.

I love this poem... I can relate to it so well and it's really quite... moving. I think everyone knows the feeling to some extent, the feeling that you portray here. Fabulous. :)

brilliant poem!thanks for reviewing mine...:)

angel4soul

Awesome. Made me drift away dreaming... Great descriptions, I can see it, smell it, feel it. Glad you're writing again! -CZ