Reviews for The Fight for Uiveran

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onlytome623 2006-02-22 ch 9, anon.	abusewow this story is awsome! i cant wait for the next chapter
Alysia 2005-08-22 ch 9, anon.	abuseI just wanted to say that I love this story! It was a little bit confusing at first... but then I really got into it. All of the elements of the story are really interesting. I really hope that you update soon!
Limelight Lover 2005-08-03 ch 9,	abusethis is a really good story, please keep writing!
J. A. Rowan 2005-07-27 ch 9,	abuseI got confused at first after you introduced everyone, but i went back and wrote it all down... : ) But i really liked it, and cant wait for another chapter. Thanks. ~Bree
Comic Book Bible 2005-07-27 ch 9,	abuseso the truth comes out. amazing. its coming out nicely. but why did you add in the summary that they hate each other? or was it already like that?
Stephanie 2005-07-17 ch 9, anon.	abuseYay!! You finally updated!! I enjoyed hearing the aftermath of the events of the first five chapters and which weapons each of the Conquerors got. That was most interesting. This is one of my favorite of your stories, I think. Do continue more!! When are they going to get to Uiveran?
swords-and-magic 2005-07-15 ch 9,	abuseWell, first to say I'm not mad at you for not updating "A Forced Rooming." I'm actually glad you stopped that story and started this one. It's great. I hope you stay on this one, because I really like this one, better than "A Forced Rooming." If you're interested, I've been writing a fantasy story. Stop by it and read it sometime. It's called "The Demon Slayer From Earth." If you review, I'll keep updating. We can read each other's stories, then we'll always have someone reviewing. ;) later.-swords-and-magic
Cannon 2005-07-13 ch 9,	abusethis story is AWESOME! faves!
Comic Book Bible 2005-05-25 ch 8,	abuseoh shoot. man this is WONDERFUL! i can't believe there are so many talented writers here! my god, and im not one of them... oh well!
Romulan Empress 2005-02-13 ch 8,	abuseNow this is an interesting bit of foreshadowing. Is Mara going to do a Valerie and write an unhappy ending? Fascinating... By all means, do continue. Do they get to Uiveran next chapter? On a constructive criticism note, you have the same problem I often face when writing. You rush through the opening sequence to get to the real action. While I also like getting to the action, a strong opening is vital to the plot. I think you should have spaced the finding of the Conquerers out a wee bit more. It was still good though, and I cannot wait for next chapter!
Meitora 2005-02-12 ch 7,	abuseInteresting. I understand that this is a fantasy and therefore clearly not supposed to be realistic, but having these kids rattle off their IQs rings false. A good fantasy needs to be grounded in some sort of reality; if that reality is modern Earth as a reader can identify, then the characters should obey the rules and norms of their time - unless they violate them for plot-specific reasons. I like the distinctive flavor your characters have. In an ensemble story it's vital that the protagonists be easily distinguished by their quirks, speech patterns, and mannerisms. Good luck with your story. You have a solid start and I'm interested to see where you go. Aroo!
MageDay 2005-02-12 ch 7,	abuseI enjoy how you introduce all of yer characters first; so now enough with the opening sequence and lets start climbing up the plot! :D Keep writing, and update when you can!
Romulan Empress 2005-02-12 ch 7,	abuseThis is so exciting! I cannot wait until everyone gets to Uiveran and the real fun begins! You can really go places with this- I just know it! This could be your masterpiece, Mara! I imagine that if you get it completed, and maybe expand upon it a little bit too, you could get it published! Please, continue quickly!
Romulan Empress 2005-02-11 ch 6,	abuseI could swear you acquired a personal cloaking device, snuck to Collegiate, and took notes on Robert because Jake sounds EXACTLY like him. LOL Pretty good chapter. I liked the boys' side better. Give me physics over fashion any day! You have got to write more. Is Jake going to become a main character? Continue! Now!
Romulan Empress 2005-01-17 ch 5,	abuseLOL Funny! Cannot say much tonight, am exhausted because of NYC. Great chapters, continue quickly!

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