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| BasilPoisoning 2005-02-24 ch 1,  | abusenot to criticizes but u might want to change the "fall" in the last line to "fail" it sounds a little bit better but over all great poem |
| The Pink Angel 2005-02-22 ch 1, | abuseEven when a king is broken he is still the most powerful of all. huh I liked it. I usully only read peoms about women and get mad when someone makes men seem powerful but I liked that.(you know it kinda reminds me of the kings out LOTR) |
| Fire Djinn 2005-02-02 ch 1, | abuseCrude and effective. It gets your tale across, no dancing around the point. |
| Joey7691 2005-01-29 ch 1, | abuseSo true. You portrayed a kingdom well. |
| urbancinderella 2004-12-29 ch 1, anon. | abuseI like the simple style- so many people get buried under adjectives. :) Very pretty. |
| Rose of Granuaile 2004-12-27 ch 1, | abusenice, very nice. I like your rhythm.~Lady Jeannette |