Reviews for vodka with lemon syrup

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Branwen 999 2005-12-22 ch 1, anon.	abuseeveryone bleeds.
addie pray 2005-04-27 ch 1,	abuseLoved this. Your style, well, what I've read so far, is awesome. Hmm. Critism: I didn't really like the line "curled in a grin of pleasure"...it just didn't seem to fit well. Eh. That's just what I thought. The ending was gorgeous.
katmonkey 2005-04-11 ch 1,	abuseWow, this is amazing. Going straight on my favourites! lime-girl
do not resuscitate 2005-03-22 ch 1,	abuse'I stared at your seductive lipscurled in a grin of pleasureand forced my unpainted ones into the same position. Youtossed your midnight hair before my face, and I strugglednot to bury myself inside' this is amazing. i pasted my favorite part above, but i love the entire thing. beautiful.
grim-dreamer 2005-03-01 ch 1,	abuseSorry for the extremely delayed feedback (I try to read everyone who reviews me, I really do...) I recalled reading this poem in the past, back in the days when fictionpress was mucking around and kept having system errors, so I suppose my opinion never got through - until now. You're right, the poem might sound trashy, making you think Contemporary Literature, which shine desperately on the shelves of any bookstore too poor to afford lighting, but no, I'm saying nice things about this poem, so don't start getting angry me just yet... Why 'vodka with lemon syrup'? I'm not a drinker - is there a symbolic explanation? The woman you portray may look 'well-made', yet the fact she is, as your final stanza describes, 'a shallow drink', emphasises an importance in beauty owning substance cynical laugh. The third stanza is my favourite.
der fiddlesticks 2005-02-16 ch 1,	abuseYou certainly do have a way with words, Tablesalt. You have a rhythm that just won't quit. I found you through Zen Phoenix's poetry site, and it was worth the trip. You rock.
thosewhomustbecarried 2005-02-07 ch 1,	abuseHa, I like it. I don't see how it is angst :) "I tried to listen but I could only hear the sound/of your fingers tapping a complicated rhythm on the table." The poem is clever whether you intended it to be or not - the beauty of poetry ^-^ keep it up, cheers.
shakrya 2005-01-29 ch 1,	abusei love it. different and yet totally you girl! keep it up. and no it isnt angst.
protagonist 2005-01-29 ch 1,	abusehey, it's really good.. i esp. like the last line.. kiu! (:
poetic abortion 2005-01-27 ch 1,	abuseThis is really good. You used a good choice of words and descrubed the emotions well. Good job~!! ~* Noelle *~
linaeve 2005-01-21 ch 1,	abusetrashy, yes, but tasteful trash. beautiful images & stream-of-conscious symbolism. wonderfully done. -lin
and if theyy get me 2005-01-20 ch 1,	abusegreat poem. please erase teh apology at the end, as your poem deserves better treatment. it is very good lol
Manuel Fajar 2005-01-09 ch 1,	abuseSuperb poem. I'd remove the angsty apology at the end and let it stand and walk on its own—it really is rich in detail and expressiveness; and, an absolute delight to read. Been there, felt that—only, I didn't use to care about the shallowness 'til it was too late!
Kalopsia 2005-01-02 ch 1,	abuseThis is great poetry right here. Yes, it's trashy- BUT GOOD. So maybe you should write more like this if you don't.
Kamay ko ang nagsulat 2004-12-28 ch 1,	abuseSomehow, your poem speaks more on sex rather than Vodka. However, I would like to comment on your way of comparing Vodka to that person. But similar to what i have said to a writer whose latest poem you reviewed, it's so so.

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