You must continue this, this is definitly book material, as well as an animated special.

In the words of Nelson, "Ha-haa!" Serves her right, the brat; I think you've done good on this chapter. It sounds like a good kids book, or even movie (i guess cuz it reminds me of Lady and the Tramp). Till the next chapter, bye.

*Pega-Gryph.

I've finally gotten to reading more of this story: you tell 'er Alexander *whistle*! Sorry, I'm goin' overboard, this is good Writerfoever, she's finally getting a taste her own kibble. Till the next chapter man, keep up the good work.

*Rojer.

That'll teach her! Update soon

Still can't be bothered to sign in. Go Alexander! Teach that Tess a lesson

Cant be bothered to sign in. Anyhoo. Poor stray dog! Kara is nice to give her food. Meanwhile Tess is not nice.

Shesh! Could Tess be anymore stuck up?

How mean, atleast Thomas felt a little down for not sharing his, it seems to me that Tess doesn't deserve Kara and Thomas's friendship no matter what she tells herself. This is good, I wonder what will happen next? Update soon!

*Pega-Gryph.

M-how aweful, very selfish and unthinkable behaviour. Pretty short, but I'm game for the next bit, good job man.

*pegagryph.

Pronouns...you need to use pronouns! The example that I will always remember is "Vicky was riding a horse. Vicky was very nervous. Vicky thought Vicky would fall off." thats what your writing reminds me of sometimes. Please don't be mad at me, I love you! But I really do love this story! Keep going!

Auch. Vain little thing, isn't she? She'll be learning a lesson soon enough, I guess.

Great chapter!

Gryph