So far, this is very good. I'd read more, but I'm really tired. Plus I have school tomorrow. Looking forward to reading the rest.

another great chappie. talk about a humiliating registration... i loved the whole pen ordeal... its always so interesting to see such small inventions through new eyes.

Great chapter! i thought the part with he dogs was funny; poor guy must have been so scared ^^

Meh! Short on time, have to make this extremely short and am begging forgiveness for shortness...

LOVE the way this story is progressing and Emie's beginning development...am still fascinated by her character, too...Again, the amount of time you put into your descriptions is wonderful. I can see things as they're happening, and, after all, it's the little details that can sometimes make the most difference, no? Lol, great story...please update soon!

Hmm... So I'm guessing that Emie is under some kind of curse or something now? I thought she was just having a nightmare at first, but after the talk between her and Darus, looks like I was wrong.

Darus, of course, still has that interesting, mysterious flavor going for him, and just like all good mysterious heroes (or perhaps... villains?) he's disappeared for awhile. I hope we get a few chapters from his point of view.

Nice little look into a bit of Adri's past. Normally I'd complain about finding out something like that so quickly (what can I say, I'm kind of guilty of building up too much suspense at times)but you managed to fit it in perfectly. Nearly brought a tear to my eye.

Hope you keep going with this story, looks like it will definitely be interesting.

Nice to see your chapters are getting longer. I started to get a touch confused in the middle of this chapter, but other than that, I liked it.

Emie being influenced certainly was interesting. A spell that acts alot like a drug, very nice. And boares, beasts that hunt down fugitives and political prisoners? Very very nice. And Darus being just a plain, young farmer? My **! He's way too mysterious for that. Can't wait to see how he develops.

Been meaning to catch up on this story for awhile and I'm glad that I've finally got enough time to do it. You've got a talent creating nice enjoyable characters.

Emie is definitely growing on me and I liked the touch about her weak joints (I'm guessing arthritis of some sort, or something along those lines?) It adds a touch of realism which helps Emie become more of a real person in your mind.

And the whole part with the horse was great, I thought that was well written also. Too many times I've read a story where the character has never so much as seen a horse before and then the next chapter, they're fighting off bandits while guiding the horse with their teeth or something. Nice to see a character that has to stop and wonder just how exactly one climbs onto a horse.

The part with the Saibluans felt a little bit rushed, but that might just be me. It didn't feel like you were trying to get off a huge point or anything, perhaps just giving us a taste of things to come (the fact that they use science while the Epians use magic). Which is fine, but I would've liked a little bit more.

Anyways, glad to see this going well, and now I'm moving on to the next chapter.

Wowzers, this is really well-written!! I think mah favorite character's probably Miak... don't know why. I absolutely love the part in the carriage: very realistic, they sound exactly like brother and sister. I couldn't spot any usage errors... it all looks just fine to me! ^_^ Keep up the great writing and update soon!!

-I.S.S.

P.S. To all lovers of anime: go and find the petition to save anime! Bush is going to ban anime... maybe... Even if it is a hoax, we cannot lose anime! GO AND SAVE INU-CHAN AND RUROKEN AND YUYU FRICKIN' HAKUSHO!!

P.P.S. To Miss Dane, sorry about that... :sweatdrop: Once again, the story's absolutely wonderful!

Hm... possible love interest?

I don't really have much to say... other than Maik is annoying :) She comes off as younger than seventeen. I actually was thinking she was ten or so. I don't know if you did that on purpose.

And... I was wondering if you could just update with a whole new chapter instead of just adding onto this one. I want to read more, but I doubt I'll remember to keep checking this one :D

Hope Darus comes back...he will... right? Please update this, there's so many things going on, like secrets in th past...Darus...whats going to happen next...darus...lol. UPDATE ASAP!~birdytamel~

ACK! I just realized I wrote in my first review Emithel. Got it mixed with Emie. srry! About this chappie, lol I love the way she was feeling with the spell on her... whats going to happen to the horse? Darus seems like a VERY interesting character... *grins*

Was that a wagon? Thats really cool... she'd never seen wheels before? One thing, you wrote, "she’d never liked any of them the moment before..." I think it should be "she hadn't liked...". Thats the only thing. Great chappie, and interesting horse...~birdytamel~

Emithel is an honest, imperfect character that draws the reader's sympathy, and (for me!) admiration. I was so happy that spell worked... I feel kinda bad for the girl that wanted help. Her decision to go off on an adventure seemed a tiny bit hasty, perhaps she should debate it a bit longer, like what would happen if she DID suddenly vanish (ie school). But great beginning!~birdytamel~

I was quite confused by the first part of this chapter. Was she dreaming... or not? And if she actually *did* fall off her horse, where did it go?

Hm. Interesting.

I really liked this chapter. Especially how her mind was reacting to the sleeping spell. Good job.

And I like Darus. I dunno why. He's a little mysterious and a bit creepy... but I like him.

Come to think of it, I like Dilli too.