thyis needs an awesome guitar riff, a rock band and some dancing vocals..

That was really good. I like the rhymes.

that was weird...but funny. i like it...it sounded like a song and that was great.

Whoo. That's pretty cool. And definately crazy. Great rhythme and word choice! It's running through my head "lollipop dream murder scene..." Awesome! I'm not quite sure precicely WHAT images it conjures, but it creates some pretty cool ones! I love it!

wow that's just great. i love it. how amazing is that? it's fantastic...you're so very talented!

Wow this is really really good. I love the truth in it, you know? It sounds wise and curious.

Wow. I don't reallt know what to say. Intriguing, powerful, well-written, amazing. And slightly confusing. But I like that about it. Really good job!