KEE EN. YOU EVIL BOY. HOW COULD YOU NOT TELL ME YOU HAVE FP HRMPF. *clears throat* ok haha WELCOME. Hehe it's a good first poem! Except that I tried reading it aloud and the rhythm was really erratic and inconsistent. You might want to take note of the number of syllables in each line and keeping them as close as possible so that the rhythm is more or less consistent. The rhyming, though forced at certain points, is still poetic and enchanting. Good job there.

wow.i like this.the last line really gets me...so true.