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| negligible fictional force 2004-12-29 ch 1,  | abuseheyheyhey. hello pigsie's and phang's friend! whoa. this poem is quite angsty, yeah? i think that's a topic to stray from. however, you do have an extensive vocabulary that you don't stinge on, giving this poem an almost archaeic feel. it's a bit chunky. you should change the structure yeah? all the same, it's quite good for a beginning effort, keep it up! -kismet. |