hey. nice imagery here. this was nicely done. but i felt that the last stanza was a little weird. like it was just chucked in or soemthing. the lines seemed a little 'stuck'.

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hallo ke! xP i like this one. strong imagery, suitable vocabulary and totally pretty. it's a prettay poem yaye! knvm. but you get the idea, dont you? hey if you add me on msn i could help you edit! WHE. yes. ask pigsie for my email yes?

love it. lovely lovely imagery. your style could use refining. like an uncut diamond your poetry is! you can, by the way, edit structure after uploading. ask pigsie to give you a hand! -kismet.