Glad he's going to be ok, great story. Your a really great author, good writting. Can't wait to read more, write more soon.

Ilike it, a bit self conflicting in one part though. You say Slade Isn't one to like mope or feel bad for himself, but you also had him described as depressed earlier... I dunno. Either way I like the story telling so far. Oh and, hi Dev. It's great to finally be getting back to fiction press.

FINALLY AN UPDATE I thought it would never come! Keep up the good work

Wow, the angst in this is very real. I feel for these characters and the impossible relationship angle is a sturdy base to rest a story on. Hope you keep this story going. Nice touch adding the song lyrics. I've never heard the song but maybe now I'll look for it. I do that a lot too, look for inspiration in songs of all sorts. Maybe I'll try that technique too; adding lyrics to give things that added credability.

Take Care,RainShadow2005

Great chapter, i loved it. can't wait to read more. Write more soon.

I like it...keep it comming

Well I certainly did like it...I'd like 2 c another chapta

The idea behind it is nice, if a little sad, and the story as a whole so far looks interesting, but there are a few things lacking. The story doesn't really flow for one (Though this will make me sound like an English Teacher, you use nothing but simple sentences, and it's a pain to read, even though the story therein is good.) Also, there are a few typos, but nothing big. Just small things, like "10 piercings in each (y)ear." having the extra letter and "Hey Ky aren't you babysitting?" missing a comma after Ky.