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| Rubel 2005-05-24 ch 1,   | I like the delicatness of the lines, short, simple but with good expressive words. Also, excellent simile. I'll call it a simile because you used the word "like"... IT GIVES ME THE RIGHT! And thank you for the review! Nothing at all has happened on my account for a LONG time... until you popped by that is. |
| Ahemait 2005-05-23 ch 1, | oh wow! that was a really good poem and i loved the idea of it. excellently written |
| Spatula-Master 2005-05-21 ch 1, | *stunned*That was really beautiful! It's really refreshing to find a metaphor that actually gets a decent image going in your head. KUDOS! I really, really, REALLY like this poem!Just to be nit-picky, there were two really tiny things I wanted to mention. The first was that the second last line might sound better if you say 'pouring down ON my skin'. The second is that the word brittle doesn't quite fit with the image of tissue paper. Like, I know what you're trying to get at, but brittle just doesn't seem to work. *blinks* Yea, aside from that... *adds to favs*Thanks for randomly reviewing my stuff! Otherwise I would have never found you! ~SpatulaMaster |
| Ariaenia 2005-01-31 ch 1, | Amazing imagery usage here! Very dramatic, and it speaks to the reader.Thank you for your reviews! Ariaenia |
| Faded-Memories 2005-01-03 ch 1, | hey i love ur peom its simple yet powerful even with very few words |
| AllyCred 2005-01-02 ch 1, | i loved this coz the way you brought the comparison between promises and tissue paper was very original and nicely done. love it. lots of love ~AllyCred~ |
| foolishshady 2004-12-30 ch 1, | really nice analogy or metaphor, i get those mixed up, lets just say comparison, lol, but yeah, really nice, i like your work so far, really good |