ok, this made me chuckle:

"A roar of furry broke out from over head."

this one too:"I cannot afford to waist time.." you meant waste

i like this line: "She shouted. Her voice echoed down the hall like an angered god."

i like how action paced this story is and nice cliffy

*SW*

Verry good

but how many chapters total? Anyhew GOOD

Another roar, and the green dragon was almost on top of them. His claws were extended, reaching out towards Artex. She snorted; a sound that meant more than mere agitation. It’s flaming eyes held strong against the green beast, and did not falter, but her pace remained as straight as before, with only one goal in mind, and that was home. o that was a very good part please write more ^__^

Verry good keep it up

So far so good. I see ur putting those ideas to very good use. can't wait to see what will unfold, seems to me that this story can go just about anywhere. keep up the good work.

I can't wait for the next update !! Spectacular story !!

~ Noelle ~

o:deep breath:o

ok im done. can't wait for the next updates! =D *SW*

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really nice really good and again make more chapters :) :)

i love the first lines. GREAT way to start it!

a couple of spelling errors... but it is intriguing so far!!

*Silent Writer*

Thank you for your reviews on 'In a Haunted Cemetery' and 'Your Dolphin' (it was about the tsunami that hit asia...=/ )

O.O Well done Feral !!

~ Noelle ~

Good work. There are very few spelling errors and you keep me wanting to read more! Keep up the good work and post the next chapter!Demon Hunter