Hey. Oh I loved it! Truly,I did! Oh, excuse me, I should introduce myself.

I'm Megan, Derek's friend. He mentioned your stories, and I just had to read one. This one caught my eye as soon as I saw it, it was the title did it.

I loved how you used your words. Now don't think I'm a senseless complimenter, if I find something to criticize, I'll touch on it, but I never flame. ~_^ I find no criticism needed, so, well...it's nice.

Good job. May God bless you.

Love,Megan

P.S. Hope you find a publisher, I look forward to new stories.

Nice descriptions of the angels, You should write more of these.

~Vortus Mordekai

Would you like me to find you a publisher? This is excellent work and well I'd be bowing but this is the Internet. I loved the figurine details and the representation flowed into this piece quite nicely. You rock!

poor angels some turning flawed shattered and broken. Great story though. wonderful description over the angels

Hey, I was bird watching and I saw a loon. Wait, it was just Krista. Anyhow, nice little blurp out of her I enjoyed it.

I just wanted to say before I get to the content of the review, my intent is not to flame or ** you off, my intent is to help you improve. I hope you find my review helpful and you are free to contact me at any time in response to my review.

First things first, your first sentence is a fragment. Don't know if that was intentional or not.

Then in your second paragraph "They are an elite breed of craft" it's awkward. Why? Craft is defined (according to dictionary.com) as skill in doing or making something... These are objects, ie tangible, a skill is an abstract, ie intangible concept. Also with your next sentence, I'd be careful, you're trying to take on too much with it. You're trying to tell us that these things are really really refined/developed/skill requiring, and you're trying to tell us the ppl who make these have to be really skilled and have divine calling... while they are a bit related, these are two seperate concepts.

Third paragraph second sentence: instead of a comma, try a semicolon; its used for two ideas that are related but don't quite deserve a period.

next... "watching me in awe and wonder from a lit showcase" ... what that sentence does do is tell us there's a lit showcase these things watch from. Something it also does is to leave us with ambiguity. Now leaving the reader with some ambiguity is not necessarily a bad thing, but when it's ambiguity over the meaning of your sentence then its bad. What do you mean by lit case, do you mean it has lights inside? is it lit up by light from a nearby torch? how lit is it? etc.

so next thing... "The face was wise, yet humble, quiet, and..." The problem here is that you set something up and just abandoned it. You set up a patter of A yet b, or adjective, yet adjective. By not following that pattern you cheat the reader. There are two solutions. The first one (which I personally prefer) is going through a series, eg, "wise yet horrible, fierce yet compassionate, disgusting yet beautiful" or something of that sort. The other solution is to go "Wise, yet horrible. Other stuff here", by placing the period there you seperate the two so you can still communicate both ideas, and your reader doesn't feel cheated.

Overall, I liked this story a lot. This sounds like a really cool collection for someone to have and the ending is awesome. Keep writing.