| Reviews for Breathe Without Air |
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Grayhome 3/11/07 . chapter 1I understand what you're trying to say, but I think you could strengthen it a bit. You've communicated an idea, but without sufficient emotion. And it IS a good idea, by the way. |
fadedrainbows 12/4/05 . chapter 1Aw, this is so cute! It's very short, and normally I don't like very short poems, but this is cute! Well done. |
addie pray 2/26/05 . chapter 1Gorgeous. |
Crazy Biene 1/23/05 . chapter 1I think you have a really, really, really creative mind. I never thought of these things... all i thought of was "Omg I better not get overweight, will I have a bf sometimes soon? Am I going to fail in school?" U know what I mean? Typical teenage questions... Welcome to my world! -rolls eyes and snickers- anyway I realy like this... I love th ending," Just maybe, I could live Without you" that rocked butt! That also shows character... you are a strong-willed grl...right? Am I right or am I right? Im too talkative. Let me shut up! Anyway to make this short..good job. |
Seeker of the Way 1/22/05 . chapter 1woah! genius at work! go see "House of the Flying Daggers" ! It's BRILLIANT! |
CrazyChik 1/15/05 . chapter 1Aw...I loved it! |
myno 1/12/05 . chapter 1beautiful. The rythm is superb, and I love the comparison of one you love to air- i often feel that way about a certain guy. I think you might enjoy my poem "Mouth to Mouth," but I don't care whether or not you read it, i get enough reviews without begging. Just that it has the same idea behind it as this poem. |
Rocky G 1/12/05 . chapter 1Very awesome poem, I like the line see without eyes the most. The ending is perfect, its all perfect. I enjoyed reading your work I will have to add this to my favorites list. Rocky |
Ivy Thorn 1/12/05 . chapter 1You have a deliciously straightforward way with words that can still imply deeper undertones. I love the outward simplicity of this poem and all that it represents. Lovely. |
Scarlet Starfire 1/12/05 . chapter 1Wow, that is very beautiful, and I can relate to it completely. It's very lovely |
CarpeDiem28 1/7/05 . chapter 1Excellent Poem. I can relate. |
Nasifah 1/4/05 . chapter 1Oh! That's so poignant! Lovely poem - you didn't waste any words. |
darkpaladin13 1/3/05 . chapter 1 I liked it. You did a great job of formatting and structure. It adds a lot to the poem and it's effect. Great work. |
Celestial-Sorrow 1/2/05 . chapter 1Works such as this was why I love your work. This short and simple piece really gets the message across! I'm wow'd ! |
WarriorHeart 1/2/05 . chapter 1incredible, as always. |