Aww i like this! it's really sweet but the structure somehow makes this more 'grown up', i love all the lines after "Of angelic white" most x weasel within x

This so so sweet and romantic ^_^ I can almost see the big, fat, white flakes fluttering down to the ground around a pair of friends and/or lovers...sigh...

aw, it's so pretty! It just renders such a beautiful image in my head! I love it! REally nice job, Ash-chan!

very vivid and idealistic. loved the imageries and the wording you used to help portray your feelings and develop your overall mood. thanks for sharing and keep writing!

Beautifully written. I liked the end of this poem.